Surgical Lies (Bob and Wheel)

Since it’s poetry month, I thought I would try out some new forms and I bumped into a great blog post from A Different Perspective listing out 13 poetic form prompts. A big thanks to them for the inspiration

Prompt 1

Write a Bob and Wheel poem or

Write a poem using the word “elastic”

A Different Perspective by muisopsis

Here are the guidelines for a Bob and Wheel:

– Quintain (five line) stanza or poem

– Rhyming pattern of a-b-a-b-a

– First line 2-3 syllables; All other lines six syllables per line

Why is it called a ‘Bob and Wheel’? Because its a combination of the “wheel” form and the “bob” forms. You can find out more here.

Ok, get ready to bob and wheel! Here I go.

(Oh and because I am who I am, I’m going to incorporate the optional prompt word “elastic” into the optional bob and wheel form because…well, just because!)


Surgical Lies

Elastic
Features and glassy eyes
Stretched tight with filled plastic
Her smile surgical lies
The knife’s edge too drastic


Well, that was interesting. The syllable count constraint definitely was the most challenging aspect as I wanted to include the line “Hiding behind surgical lies” but it was too long for the form.

Wanna give it a try?


Be well,

Monty


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11 Comments

  1. gigglingfattie says:

    LOL oh my gosh where do you find all these different types of poems?! 😅

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    1. Monty Vern says:

      Been doing my research!! Haha.

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      1. gigglingfattie says:

        😅 seems like it!

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  2. afshan18 says:

    Aah! Knife too drastic – so well put and ya so many surgical lies float around us.
    As always enjoyed…but I was expecting something with D today or is there something here which I missed?
    Anyhow good day

    http://afshan-shaik.blogspot.com/ (a to z)

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    1. Monty Vern says:

      D is coming soon! This one was a bonus and not part of the A to Z seriously silly poetry series (a bit too serious I think). Thanks for stopping by and wish you the best today.

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  3. Kathleen says:

    Forms are made to be broken…

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  4. the mouse says:

    Nice use of the prompt and additional word. Above and beyond 👍

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    1. Monty Vern says:

      Haha. Thank you so much!

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  5. writingwhatnots says:

    Haha – the perils of perfection! Enjoyed your Bob & Wheel Monty.

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    1. Monty Vern says:

      Thanks so much! Appreciate your stopping by for a read and letting me know your thoughts 🙂

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